Friday, May 2, 2014

The Writer's Voice -- SAVING SNOW (YA Lite Sci-Fi FTR)

I am so unbelievably excited to have been chosen by the Rafflecopter gods to enter The Writer's Voice!!! Fingers crossed I'll make it into the next round :) Here goes:

YA Lite Sci-Fi Fairytale Retelling
66,000 Words


In a futuristic society where soul-imaging suits are required attire and the color of a person’s image determines status, privilege, and share of precious few resources, seventeen-year-old Violet White’s gray suit constantly reminds her – and everyone else – of the taint on her soul.

In the aftermath of an electromagnetic car crash, Violet’s perfectly pure sister, Snow, goes missing. Hoping to clear her taint with an altruistic deed, Violet chases a lead into a soul extremist camp, but is confronted with evidence implicating her mother. Mrs. White kidnapped Snow, put her into an artificial coma, and skimmed her daughter’s pure soul image to display it as her own.

As much as it hurts, Violet must expose her mother, but how can a girl in a gray suit compete with the purest of them all? With the government convinced of her guilt, and her father blinded by the system, only Violet can save her sister, but she has to do it before she’s caught and convicted of a crime she didn’t commit.

SAVING SNOW is a YA light sci-fi Snow White retelling and is complete at 66,000 words. The fast pace and thriller element of this story will appeal to fans of Debra Driza’s MILA 2.0 while fans of Jodi Meadows’ INCARNATE will enjoy the main character’s relationship with and exploration of the human soul.

FIRST 250:

Fear of the impure battled the thrill of walking among them until a man brushed my arm. Fear won. I sucked in a breath and jerked away from the deep blue glow of his suit as if impurity were contagious. Maybe it was.
My palms stuck to the silky material hugging my hips as I ran my hands down my sides. The familiar motion usually calmed my nerves, but with my soul suit disconnected, my heart raced and I couldn’t manage a deep breath.
“We should go,” I said. My gaze wandered over charred buildings, cracked electronic billboards, and angry furrows where light rail tracks had been dug out and used to support the crude shacks lining the square’s perimeter. The impure had destroyed the old city.
At home, soul suits were mandatory, but here I wasn’t the only one without my soul image on display. Most people wore loose, scratchy-looking shirts and pants that revealed nothing about who they were, or what they were capable of. They could be anything: pure or impure, harmless or deadly. I ran my upper lip through my teeth and tasted salt. The unknown twisted my imagination and filled my mind with sick possibilities.
Ryan caught my elbow and I forced my attention onto his worried face. “You go ahead,” he said. “I’ll meet you back at the bikes.”
My attention slid toward the flicker of a soul suit in the crowded square where a man offered dried meat in exchange for purified water. I’d never seen a wild animal in my life, and I considered the possibility that the flesh was human.


  1. This sounds like a GREAT Snow White re-telling! Loved the voice. Good luck in the contest!

  2. I like the concept of this a lot. I had to re-read the first couple paragraphs, but then the creepiness factor picked up nicely. :) (Also, it should be known I have not yet had my coffee this morning.) Best of luck!

  3. I love retellings and this looks good. I'm working on a Little Red Riding Hood retelling right now. Good luck!

  4. Such a great premise! Good luck!

  5. Love the twist on Snow White and love that it's Snow's sister that saves her!! Good luck!!

  6. I would read the heck out of this. (Jodi Meadows fan: )

  7. Wow! What an interesting concept! Good luck!

  8. I really like your unique concept for this retelling...and the thrill of walking among the impure ;) Good luck!

  9. Thank you everyone for all of your wonderfully supportive comments :D

  10. Wow, this sounds so fun! I'm always a sucker for a good fairytale retelling, and the soul-suit twist really drew me in. Best of luck!